by J.P. Leddy
I felt his hands run down my back
as our tongues hungrily danced upon each other in wetness
Clothes ripping off our bodies
as arousal reveals itself in panting hardness
Mouths engulfing whatever they want
as two strangers unleash their animal lust
Bodies bounce on each other in building crescendo
until explosive fluids unleash with cries of passion into the air
© JP Leddy
Wow, that was really really good. That was really touching and meaningful. Really captures the raw feelings.
You captured the raw emotions on both ends, the deep need of human connection and the deep feelings of disconnect. This exist in many relationships, even those who are not strangers.
I wanted to captured both things.
Well done. 🙂
Thak you, Jamie! Appreciate your comments!
oh that totally happens when i think about someone else as I do the act
Pretty human…I think luisy.
Ah, the bitterness.. great work in building the tension, JP, well done 🙂
Thanks I tried to portray it as such.
wow, what else is there to say, raw feeling………dangerous desire with delicious imaginings manic pursuits of shifting shadows lost in vacant holes staring back from empty promises instant lonliness, the creshendo is so high and intense that the fall is sudden and violent
Thank you, ncbeachcomber.
Isn’t that always true about instant gratification…so fleeting and never lasting.
What a sensual sensuous penning! From tip to toe, from top to bottom, the poem had it grooving! very well done.. :))
Thank you, Purvi.
I love that you used the word “grooving!”
hot and cool,
u r excellent writer and very talented…
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
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all the best!
Thank you in advance!
Will do, Jingle.