SAY IT
by: JP Leddy
You know me more than the rest
Yet, you remain silent
SAY IT
You see me every morning
Yet, you remain a mute
SAY IT
You sleep with me at night
Yet, no words leave your mouth
SAY IT
You are there when I cry
Yet, you are are quiet
SAY IT
You are there when I smile
Yet, no sound do you utter
SAY IT
You are there when I feel lost
Yet, your voice is silent
SAY IT
You see me as I am
Yet, you say nothing
SAY IT
You see me when I hurt
Yet, you offer no talk of comfort
SAY IT
You know my deepest secrets
Yet, you give no response
SAY IT
You know the three simple words
Yet, Man in the Mirror, just
SAY IT
*****
This poem is written for Thursday Poets Rally Week 27…
well done,
love the wit and humor in it,
your wisdom or talent rocks!
BEST!
🙂
Thank you, Jingle!!!!
very thought provoking… I think accepting yourself for who you are is one of the most toughest tasks of all!! And sometimes, in all of this, the mind refuses to open itself up to your own situations/actions… You’ve portrayed this helplessness and frustration very beautifully over here, JP…
Kudos..
Kavita,
I appreciate your thoughts and comments. I was trying to convey the need for self love that we sometimes struggle with the most.
JP
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I love this 😀 Nice structure and great thoughts^^~Thank for sharing!
Riika,
Thank you for your feedback 🙂 Means alot to me.
JP
wow….. just to say I LOVE YOU so much??? or is it something else? 😦 😛
i loved the writing 🙂 thanks for sharing ur thought
Dancing,
I am glad that you enjoyed it and took time to comment 🙂
JP
Yes, dancing the three words were “I Love You” meaning we need to say that to ourselves sometimes that is why the direction is to the man in the mirror.
JP
🙂
Wow, very cleverly written. Great poem!
Dear deadpoet,
I appreciate your feedback. Thank you for your kind words!
JP
Thought provoking…Man in the Mirror…I felt this 🙂
Amanda,
You bless me with your comments.
JP
This is awesome. I love the repetition. Well done.
Thank you, Ewan! Appreciate your feedback. Means alot to me.
JP
oooooff! what an expressive post..! liked that ending! 🙂
Leo,
Thanks! I am glad you enjoyed it and it has impact.
JP
It is hard indeed when no one knows us like our ownselves, yet we are mute…
Beautiful poem, JP!
Thank you so much, nanno!
Very powerfully written, I like the layout and use of bold. A nice twist on a common theme.
Thank you, Jessicas, for noticing the nuances.
JP
Great poem. The repetition is great for bringing across the message all throughout the poem :3
Thank you for your feedback, Gally
JP
Wow! I love the form of this.
Thank you so much, Fray!
I enjoyed this! I thought you were talking to someone else…well done.
Silly,
I am glad I surprised u!
JP
Ah, well done … loving ourselves … sometimes tough to do.
Like the repitition and the rhythm. Definately belongs here.
Happy Rally Day …. I’ll be back for more. Good job! 🙂
Love your use of “say it”…really drives the point of what you are trying to convey across.
Hi Thought,
Thank u for noticing certain word usage and understanding the impact. Your feedback really meant a lot to me.
JP
I love the tension in this as it builds, and the surprise in it; the reveal left me with a feeling I could relate to. Nice!
Christine,
I am so glad that it personally meant something to you. Thank you for your comments!
JP
very intense was this from personal experience? I have written a few things when I was angry where my feelings took control of the poem and they had the same feel to it that this does. I liked it very much!
Amanda,
Not recently. However, there was a time in my life in my distant past where I had to learn to love myself.
Thank you for your comments!
JP
I feel only the ones who have undergone strong human emotions can SAY IT so strongly.. They value relationships more than anything. Each one is special to them. Every small gesture makes them feel proud..
Very well written..
This is what I SAY..
Olivia,
I like what you said.
JP
I wasn’t expecting the twist at the end. This was so deep and thought provoking. I have found recently that I am often not honest and open with myself because I am afraid of what I will find. Lately I have been trying to change that. A powerful poem. Thank you.
Lauren,
Thank you for sharing your personal take on this poem. It really added dimension.
JP
J
man I want it said for you!!!! great piece!!!! love the way you wrote it thanks for sharing!!!
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Peaches,
Thank you for your comments and support!!!
JP
u did an outstanding job this week,
I am impressed,
help support participants by returning favors,
or comment for new participants to encourage, get encouraged…
way to go!
Smiles!
Thanks, Jingle. Such wonderful poets.
so strong– building as a chat does, but to a surprise ending, Nicely done!
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Thank you, mairmusic.
JP
I loved the last lines especially. Very well written.
Thank you, Raven!
JP
I would love to see it on the printed page, with “say it” as a watermark.
Dear Mother2rah,
Thank you for your comments…
I hope to get printed one day.
JP
great work!
for me, it’s a wonderful example how to love urself,,
nice!
Jasmine,
Appreciate your kind words.
JP
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Good poetry…
Keep up the good work.
visit me on http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/ when you have time.
cheers
I appreciate your comments, Dakshima!
JP
Super!!! Wonderful layout and great impact!!!
Appreciate your comments,Sherrie!
Love it! You had me thinking all along this was just some long-drawn complaint against a lover, yet at the end the truth comes out. And it is so true – how can we ever expect others to give us the support we need without first opening up and accepting ourselves? When we do that we are able to reach out to give what others need and then – surprise – they give it back!
I am glad that I surprised and you got it. Thanks for commenting,also, Christina!
JP
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