Crashing
by: JP Leddy
Imploding into
Folding under
Falling over
Smashing through
Painfully
Tearfully
Achingly
Tortuously
Love left me
when he said
it left him
I went
crashing
into
a
bottle
of
drunken
stupor.
This poem is under consideration for Thursday Poets Rally Week 29 ( Sept 23 -29)
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As you said in your comment on my poem, yep, been there. Do you do the illustrations as well– very striking!
Mair,
Thanks for your comments. I did not do this illustration but it so fit what I had to say.
JP
Ooh–this is great–beautiful writing and great visuals
Angela,
Thank you!
JP
Beautifully sad. Thanks for posting,
crb.
Caribbean,
Appreciated your visit and comments,
JP
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The image is amazing…the poem even more so…Very clear…powerful…straight to the heart…in words, lay out, rythm…You hit the mark! This is a perfect poem in the world I live in!!
Lovely,
I am so glad you were moved.
JP
powerful piece.
lovely said.
Thank you, Jingle. Real experience brings it out in me.
JP
Thanks for the participation…
cheers!
Jingle,
I feel privilege to participate!
JP
Hey wow…This is really god. I love the simple nature and the flow of this.
The picture is stunning!
I liked this:-)
p.s- Thanks for your comment
Keshav,
Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it!
JP
Been there and done that….pain beautifully written.
Deborah
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Deborah,
Life sometimes brings pain but it also has joy.
JP
this is how love leaves- fabulously described.
So true, Trisha
JP
It is not only what you say, it is also how you say it. And you said it beautifuly…
Aching beauty…well done.
Great job with this poem and artwork.
I’ve crashed there many times myself. Great piece. Love and Light, Sender
staccato music.
good job =]
the shorter lines have great effect.. lovely poem! š
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So sad – I well know that crash and you described it so well!
that was really intense…
with each line, the words seem to slam in, one by one…
This is really cool.
i like how sharp and to the point it is
Hello there, JP!
I liked your choice of words…very fitting,
and it was fun tongue-work to pronounce them aloud.
Nice to meet you, and be careful with those stupors, okay?
Peace, š UT
Great poem! Love the way you use single words, says so much in such few words. It does indeed feel like a drunken stupor.
hope that you have fun!
Aww..
life experiences like this makes writers like us create a masterpiece like this!
Kudos!
LuvLuv,
B
I liked the way the illustration and the poem were all of a piece. Bravo.
Thank you, vivinfrance!
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I love the way this one is structured…like bullets of love pain firing at the reader…well said, and well done.
Tracy,
Thank you for reading my work and commenting on it.
JP